| Sunday, September 21, 2008 |
| Lord of The Flies by William Golding #4 |
Chapter 4 - Painted Faces and Long Hair
My Capture + Stupid Fatty by Jack
Finally, I killed a pig! We finally got to eat meat. I came up with a good plan and the hunters helped me out. We went up to the pig and surrounded it and we killed it! The hunters and I went to the beach and all I saw was blatant boys playing around. I noticed how all of the boys on the island had swarthiness of their skin and it was different than when we first got here. We need some kind of balm or something here..
I then tried telling Ralph my capture of the pig but all he told me was "You let the fire go out." But I mean, it's just a fire! We could always light the fire again. I tried explaining everything to Ralph of our achievement, but he just gave me a belligerence attitude. Ralph then started to tell me how there was a ship and if I had kept the fire going we would've been rescued and stuff. Then, stupid Piggy repeated of what Ralph kept trying to tell me and I just lost my temper from there. I just wanted to hit that boy. So I stuck my fist into Piggy's stomach and he sat down with a grunt. Hah! I even smacked Piggy's head and his glasses flew off and his specs broke. But whatever, he deserves it anyways. Piggy is super annoying.. One side is now broken and he then looked malevolently at me.
Since everyone was hungry I cut it and roasted it and gave some for everyone to eat. Except Piggy, of course. Silly Simon tried giving some food to Piggy. Psh! They should be thankful that I got some food for everyone. |
posted by charisse @ 1:40 PM  |
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I really like your style of writing. You are very descriptive, so the reader easily gets a picture in their mind. Also, you explain the reason behind the action that your character took.
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I liked how you used the vocabulary. I really felt like I was there. It really felt like jack was talking.
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charisse-
i HIGHLY agree with both kassidy AND daniel. your style of writing makes me feel like you were there and that you were experiencing Jacks emotions. the vocab words tie in with it too. the way you use them, it makes the sentence flow really well. YOUR A PRO!
/katielou
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I really like your style of writing. You are very descriptive, so the reader easily gets a picture in their mind. Also, you explain the reason behind the action that your character took.